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[This message has been edited by ARTRA (edited 10-16-2000).]

[This message has been edited by ARTRA (edited 10-16-2000).]

I just started yesterday, and read "Old Enough to Bleed" -- oy. OY I say. It was flat, totally unbelievable and the ending was completely predictable. The stereotypical treatment, involving White Trash and (I think) Southern Baptists just rankled the hell outta me and the use of the 16 yr old girl who we are introduced to while peeing who later gets pregnant by the lead .. well, I mean, COME ON. I don't mean to knock the author, I really really don't. I'm an avid theatre director, and script analysis is something I thrive on -- and this script just needs SOOOO much work. Thin thin thin ... and if there were really people like these in the world, they'd be too damned dumb to live. And the gratuituous sex -- geez -- use story, huh? Sorry -- and I have to say that I hope like heck that the next dozen I read are better -- MUCH better. I've just started Children of the Night -- and already can tell that it can't be made for a million dollars. And the plot is predictable ... dialogue stilted ... characters wooden. I guess my mother was right -- if wishes were horses, beggars would ride. Did I say "oy"?

As for Vigilante Granny, which my team mate DID write, it ain't for Lifetime, baby. And I would much rather have a social awareness and consciousness than to sit around and flame for no reason, though that may be the only thing that will make you feel good about yourself, putting others' work and effort down. And I notice YOU didn't list the name of YOUR script so IT can be a part of this thread.

All of the millions of people who died for your namesake and hero, and all of the millions who went to war to protect the world from your madman hero and your madnam namesake -

Well, you must be very proud of yourself for chosing an eye-catching way to get attention.

Tim Foote said once in Time magazine, "Everyone needs an editor." He was commenting on the fact that Hitler's original title for "Mein Kampf" was "Four-and-a-half Years of Struggle against Lies, Stupidity and Cowardice." Try fitting that on a billboard.

Guess old Adolph couldn't stand editors. Guess that's why he turned into such a poor loser (LOL). Okay, maybe I am demeaning your choice of a nametag...

Can those of you submitting screenplays please, please, PLEASE use a spell checker, and then re-check it the old fashioned way? And while we're at it, check your grammar, too. And use proper formatting. And think about using active voice, rather than passive. It just makes reading the script easier.

Thanks.

R

Unfortunately, for No Matter What, I transposed the titles, strike by comment. Sorry

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Originally posted by cloaker:
Moonwind, your forgetting one thing, he'd have to be able to read! you'd need to rewrite everything in crayon and add lots of stickman pictures to get anything across to this kid.

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Bullshit is bullshit in any language, in any forum.

AND ATTENTION FORCING PLOYS, NO MATTER WHAT THE REASONS, WILL NEVER TAKE THE PLACE OF REAL TALENT.